Ok, so one day I got rather bored and decided to write a blog post but I realised that I was sick of ranting and raging about everything that bothered me, and I'm sure that our 1 and a half readers are also getting tired of me hating everything. So instead, I started to write a story. I realised that the story would be far too long so I decided to write short chapters and post them whenever I could be bothered instead of torturing everyone with an insanely long post. This way you all might stay interested. So here is the first installment of The Adventures of Maggie and Rob.
CHAPTER ONE: AND SO THEY MET
The early coming darkness was Maggie's favourite thing about winter; it meant she could walk the back streets in the dark without her dad complaining about how late she would return home. The park only a few minutes walk from her house was her favourite place to sit alone, usually on the swings, to calm herself down or to think about ways to deal with life which she so often hated. Her day had been fairly bad so far and she was looking forward to sitting on the swings with her iPod in her ears, making herself dizzy as she flew into the air; but as she came over the hill, the outline of a figure in the dark came into view; a boy had stolen her swing serenity.
She meandered over to the free swing in which she knew her hips would not fit, and sat awkwardly on top and attempted to move. She was able to rock slightly back and forward but she was uncomfortable with the boy sitting next to her, and she certainly could not sing and relax like she would usually do there. The stranger looked at her and smiled.
"You are going to go deaf, but you have good taste in music so it might be worth it." He said with a laugh. She hadn't realised that her music was playing so loudly in her ear, but she smiled back and took her headphones out.
"Totally worth it. Do you live around here?" she asked.
"Yea, I'm just down the road. I'm Rob by the way. I have never seen you here before; do you usually hang out at the park?" They continued to talk about everything possible, and they shared many common interests. They liked the same music, they liked the same television shows and movies, and they seemed to like each other. They soon discovered that Rob worked with Kirsty, a good friend of Maggie's, and that they actually had a few mutual friends. Rob wondered why Kirsty had never introduced them, it was obvious that they are incredibly alike, but Maggie knew why they were not introduced. She had not yet mentioned to Rob that she had a boyfriend, and although she would never cheat on him, she had no immediate plans to inform Rob of his existence; it was too much fun to get to know him. Kirsty knew that she would think this way, and she did not want her friend getting involved; Maggie is a nice person, but when it comes to relationships she has a lot to learn about what is right.
They talked for almost two hours until Maggie's phone started ringing; it was her dad telling her to come home for dinner. Normally Maggie would be over the moon about going home for her dad's steak and vegetables with cheesy sauce, but she was enjoying herself too much.
"It was nice to meet you Rob, but my dad has cooked me an amazing dinner and I just can't resist." she said hesitantly.
"Yea my mum is probably wondering where I am too." And with that they went their separate ways without phone numbers or addresses, and only Kirsty to help them contact each other.
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There you have it folks, part one of the lovely story of Maggie and Rob. I hope you enjoyed it and I look forward to posting part two. Thanks for reading.
-Renji
3 comments:
This is a really good idea, I've been thinking of trying something like this as well because I don't have to gusto to belt out my postmodern gothic 17th century magnum opus... that'd just end up being Dorian Gray but with more flippant cursing...
I criticise because I love, where's the rest of the dialogue? I get a feel you're trying to push a point across in three paragraphs but the dialogue started off really well, then turned into more of a description of conversation. I dunno, don't be afraid to just go a paragraph of conversation, people figure out who's saying what. I dunno, things like 'they shared common interests' seems wasteful when, knowing you, there's huge potential for little quirks and things to give it that edge.
What you do with it will be the best part, it's a really good twist on the concept. It's realistic and easy to associate with. The chance meeting thing is done so often, but your setting has sort of earthed it. Not to mention the whole idea of going out to be alone as the trigger and everything.
Well CT I appreciate input as always. I just thought I would try something new so when I write my next installment I shall try and put more dialogue in it although it really is not my strong point. We'll have to see how that goes.
I like.
The incremental story idea is one I've been tinkering with in my head for quite some time, glad to see someone has stolen the rains of creativity to force me too actually do it some time.
BTW i might actually post soon.
Uncanny.
-Shady
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